In my personal essay I tried to remember to follow as many hints from A Writers Resource (Maimon, Peritz, Yancey). In the writing it began by telling how important personal writing is and how true it is. Personal essays are meaningful not only to the writer but to the audience who reads. Personally I enjoy these essays because of how easy they are to relate to and to write. There is nothing a person knows more about than themselves, especially the really conceited ones.
The main tips that I received and used were to show that the essay is meaningful to the author. Secondly to not summarize events, instead go into detail to show emotion. Ironically the opposite of what I am currently doing. Making the essay personal is also very important hence why it is called a personal writing. I did this by trying to relate to others, I use first person, going into flash backs making the events seem to actually be happening. The key to a great personal essay in my opinion. These are the main points emphasized in a personal essay instructed by a writer’s resource.
Monday, September 29, 2008
Monday, September 15, 2008 Disagreeing Beliefs
If everyone can learn to trust and love peace will overcome. All the worlds’ problems can be solved with peace. Those who continually are overcome by their anger are only hurting themselves and each other more. War creates hate and vengeance. If we can all learn to forgive than we can all learn to live in peace? War is the reason for all problems; nothing has ever been solved with war.
War is regrettably the easiest way to revolutionize. War can create eternal enemies but it can also stop them. By making a person or people put down their guard by destroying it much can be accomplished. They realize how weak they are and to not try to impose on others ways of life. War although is given a bad reputation has fixed many of the worlds problems. When used for greed and power it is a horrible thing, but when used for good by protecting or stopping inhumane activities it can be the “grace of god”. War can show people how truly great life is, that at all cost we should try to be good to each other and to those who are not good to others there are repercussions for their crimes.
War is regrettably the easiest way to revolutionize. War can create eternal enemies but it can also stop them. By making a person or people put down their guard by destroying it much can be accomplished. They realize how weak they are and to not try to impose on others ways of life. War although is given a bad reputation has fixed many of the worlds problems. When used for greed and power it is a horrible thing, but when used for good by protecting or stopping inhumane activities it can be the “grace of god”. War can show people how truly great life is, that at all cost we should try to be good to each other and to those who are not good to others there are repercussions for their crimes.
Response Monday, September 15, 2008
Response
http://www.cnn.com/2008/POLITICS/09/14/campaign.wrap/index.html
On this URL it is addressed if “McCain went to far in adds” on CNN’s internet news. Although the headline of this article was a quote I think there might have been a little bias in the overall article. Although the article had a mostly even contrast of how both politicians are wrong about the other the scale seemed to lean a little towards Obama being the nicer man. However even if this is true he’s a celebrity why wouldn’t he be nice? O that’s why its politics since the beginning of the American Democratic system of government there has been disputes between two opposing viewpoints. That is the way democracy works. The fact is that in politics people try to make their opponent lose. In order to do this they often do their best to bring out the worst in the opponent. Although this does not follow the golden rule it is a strategy that works. Rove wails on McCain for going to far but people said the same thing about Hilary Clinton and Barack Obama they both would tell the worst about the other. On this issue people did not like the rude comments Hilary and Bill Clinton said about their opponent, and it seemed that people did not seem to like it. I say let them bring out the dirt, how mean they are and how they react can tell the people a lot about their personality and how they will run the country. Since the original issues between Hamilton and Jefferson their has been anger against opposing viewpoints and people and it can cause people to do bad things. We as voters get to judge them for their actions, so why tell them not to if it’s who they are.
http://www.cnn.com/2008/POLITICS/09/14/campaign.wrap/index.html
On this URL it is addressed if “McCain went to far in adds” on CNN’s internet news. Although the headline of this article was a quote I think there might have been a little bias in the overall article. Although the article had a mostly even contrast of how both politicians are wrong about the other the scale seemed to lean a little towards Obama being the nicer man. However even if this is true he’s a celebrity why wouldn’t he be nice? O that’s why its politics since the beginning of the American Democratic system of government there has been disputes between two opposing viewpoints. That is the way democracy works. The fact is that in politics people try to make their opponent lose. In order to do this they often do their best to bring out the worst in the opponent. Although this does not follow the golden rule it is a strategy that works. Rove wails on McCain for going to far but people said the same thing about Hilary Clinton and Barack Obama they both would tell the worst about the other. On this issue people did not like the rude comments Hilary and Bill Clinton said about their opponent, and it seemed that people did not seem to like it. I say let them bring out the dirt, how mean they are and how they react can tell the people a lot about their personality and how they will run the country. Since the original issues between Hamilton and Jefferson their has been anger against opposing viewpoints and people and it can cause people to do bad things. We as voters get to judge them for their actions, so why tell them not to if it’s who they are.
Response
http://news.yahoo.com/s/ap/20080929/ap_on_bi_ge/financial_meltdown
In the past few days the American people have been on edge. Let alone the whole world. The American stock market is plummeting day by day. Banks are being bought out and the American people are trying to figure out if their money is safe. In the article on Yahoo news it addresses the huge upset that occured. President Bush's bailout plan of 700 billion dollars was not approved by the hose. Both Republicans and Democrats alike were astonished by the vote. The plan was made in hopes to save the American economy that had already been diminishing. The house apparently decided that this plan could not work. However this does not fix anything. Hopefully they were right in doing this. Many people believe it was the wrong decision to bail out the banks. It is the people who need help, the people who are losing money. Why feed the large banks their tax money after they lost their savings. Apparantly the House agreed with this belief. Now however everyone is struggling to create a new solution and quickly. It is not a great time for the American economy. But with the right people working on it and the strength of america we shall overcome this current obstacle, hopefully sooner rather than later.
In the past few days the American people have been on edge. Let alone the whole world. The American stock market is plummeting day by day. Banks are being bought out and the American people are trying to figure out if their money is safe. In the article on Yahoo news it addresses the huge upset that occured. President Bush's bailout plan of 700 billion dollars was not approved by the hose. Both Republicans and Democrats alike were astonished by the vote. The plan was made in hopes to save the American economy that had already been diminishing. The house apparently decided that this plan could not work. However this does not fix anything. Hopefully they were right in doing this. Many people believe it was the wrong decision to bail out the banks. It is the people who need help, the people who are losing money. Why feed the large banks their tax money after they lost their savings. Apparantly the House agreed with this belief. Now however everyone is struggling to create a new solution and quickly. It is not a great time for the American economy. But with the right people working on it and the strength of america we shall overcome this current obstacle, hopefully sooner rather than later.
Thesis for Essay
Steroids are known for their amazing ability to increase athletic capability, but are they known for the harmful effects that come with them?
In professional sports to be the best is the main goal, but to be the best there should be guidelines that need to be shared by all athletes, such as not using steroids.
Atheletes have been idonlized by young and old throughout all human history, to allow them to cheat in order to succeed creates a bad viewpoint to all fans and followers.
Steroids have many amazing abilities that come with them; Improved strength, speed, muscle mass, and hair loss.
To be the best is a goal everyone should strive for does that include doing anything possible, whether or not it is believed to be morally right and fair?
In professional sports to be the best is the main goal, but to be the best there should be guidelines that need to be shared by all athletes, such as not using steroids.
Atheletes have been idonlized by young and old throughout all human history, to allow them to cheat in order to succeed creates a bad viewpoint to all fans and followers.
Steroids have many amazing abilities that come with them; Improved strength, speed, muscle mass, and hair loss.
To be the best is a goal everyone should strive for does that include doing anything possible, whether or not it is believed to be morally right and fair?
Peer Review
Peer Review is beneficial for many reasons but is disliked for many reasons also. Peer review is a helpful way to have your paper critiqued in that having someone else reviews your paper is much more beneficial. This is because having a second reader can find many mistakes the writer will often time skip over. Much of this is due to that writers sometimes re-read their papers not so much by reading them but by rehearsing what they were thinking. Peer review is also beneficial in that you get a second perspective on how your paper is and you also get to see someone else's perspective on a paper. However difficulties are presented when doing a peer review. First you have to not be shy about your reading because you are going to be critiqued right to your face by a fellow student. This can create a level of inferiority by students, which can decrease their confidence in writing. Another difficulty with peer review is it often times can change your opinion to something you truly did not want to do, making your final paper not as well as it could have been.
Monday, September 22, 2008
Response on The U.N.
http://www.nytimes.com/2008/09/22/opinion/22collier.html
On this opinion article on the new york times the issue of what the U.N. is doing was brought up. That the poorest parts of the world are getting poorer. That we have been overestimating how good the world. The article said that the U.N. needs to help countries in the poorest part of the world catch up not the poor but fast growing counties and middle income countries continue to grow. Although i agree that the U.N. needs to make a change because they are no longer doing anything. Maybe the world should give America a little more respect we are one of the richest countries in the world and are constantly doing are part to help. America not the U.N. are the super heroes of the world whenever there is a national disaster, an evil ruler takes over, or a shortage of food who helps? America and the American people. The United Nations have become more a group of power loving representatives trying to see the world in the best way possible and trying to never make conflict. Instead of stepping in to stop conflict they will let it pursue in order to stay out of it themselves. America was looked down upon when Bush sent in troups into Iraq when looking for WMD's. Bush even at the time was trying to consent with the U.N. and if they would have helped instead of stopping maybe something would have been found. Maybe not, we will never know now. America was one of the founders of the United Nations to help keep the world in order instead it has slowly died into a relatively obsolete group.
On this opinion article on the new york times the issue of what the U.N. is doing was brought up. That the poorest parts of the world are getting poorer. That we have been overestimating how good the world. The article said that the U.N. needs to help countries in the poorest part of the world catch up not the poor but fast growing counties and middle income countries continue to grow. Although i agree that the U.N. needs to make a change because they are no longer doing anything. Maybe the world should give America a little more respect we are one of the richest countries in the world and are constantly doing are part to help. America not the U.N. are the super heroes of the world whenever there is a national disaster, an evil ruler takes over, or a shortage of food who helps? America and the American people. The United Nations have become more a group of power loving representatives trying to see the world in the best way possible and trying to never make conflict. Instead of stepping in to stop conflict they will let it pursue in order to stay out of it themselves. America was looked down upon when Bush sent in troups into Iraq when looking for WMD's. Bush even at the time was trying to consent with the U.N. and if they would have helped instead of stopping maybe something would have been found. Maybe not, we will never know now. America was one of the founders of the United Nations to help keep the world in order instead it has slowly died into a relatively obsolete group.
Using quotes
I recently read an article from The Spokesman Review on the debate between Christine Gregiore and Dino Rossi. The author or the article Rachel La Corte used quotes well to emphasize. When blame was put on Gregoire the author said how she was quick to blame another politician in this case the Bush administration. Gregiore said " no place in America has escaped the failed economic policies of the George W. Bush administration policies that my opponent has supported. By using this quote the author both showed Gregoires view on her opponent Dino Rossi trying ot blame him while at the same time showing she was quick to shove off her own blame on the president. This quote along with others showed the writers view on the debate. While not making herself seem bias it seemed most of the quotes seemed to be a little more favorable to Rossi. Rachel La Corte was keen to bring in facts like the loss of jobs since Gregoire to office right before she would state Gregoire’s points making them seem obsolete..
Lessons From THEY SAY I SAY
Lessons From THEY SAY I SAY
In They Say I Say by Graff and Berkenstien from pages 17-47 the book helps to teach how to address a paper in which there is an opposing view to your own. In a good persuasive essay you should reveal the opposition first. Although this isn’t what we were taught earlier it shows we have more important events later in the essay. Other ways to begin persuasive essays are with past presenters on the same subject or using facts and quotes. Later in the reading it gave many useful examples of introducing different views. For example “On the one hand________argues________” putting your own argument in. A final intro method is to introduce with a view or topic that your audience agrees with then later bring up the argument that they disagree with. A truly good writer will keep the opposing argument in the writing the whole time and continue to prove your point. But an even better writer can make it seem that any point is their own, whether or not they actually support it. To make the paper stronger strong words should be used such words to emphasize your main point. To further increase the strength quotes should be used. However quotes should not be thrown in. They must be relevant and supported. The book used a “quote sandwich” meaning to set up the quote then show how it supports.
In They Say I Say by Graff and Berkenstien from pages 17-47 the book helps to teach how to address a paper in which there is an opposing view to your own. In a good persuasive essay you should reveal the opposition first. Although this isn’t what we were taught earlier it shows we have more important events later in the essay. Other ways to begin persuasive essays are with past presenters on the same subject or using facts and quotes. Later in the reading it gave many useful examples of introducing different views. For example “On the one hand________argues________” putting your own argument in. A final intro method is to introduce with a view or topic that your audience agrees with then later bring up the argument that they disagree with. A truly good writer will keep the opposing argument in the writing the whole time and continue to prove your point. But an even better writer can make it seem that any point is their own, whether or not they actually support it. To make the paper stronger strong words should be used such words to emphasize your main point. To further increase the strength quotes should be used. However quotes should not be thrown in. They must be relevant and supported. The book used a “quote sandwich” meaning to set up the quote then show how it supports.
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